Wednesday, April 7, 2010

LEAD PARAGRAPH IDEAS

 The Moonwalk is Everywhere at Green Central

         Today the Moonwalk is the most popular dance move at Green Central.  Since 1975 when Michael Jackson made the Moonwalk famous, many kids have learned this move.  Here at Green Central, Chris is the most famous Moonwalker. He moves his feet up and down and then slides to the left or slides to the right.  Because it’s fun, he has many followers.  Kids can’t stop Moonwalking.  Teachers find that moonwalking is a very smooth way to move around the hallways but most teachers don’t know how to do it.  Is moonwalking a fad, something that will go away soon?  Chris said, “No, it’s not a fad.”




A Burning Kid
By Jakelin
On the afternoon of April 3, 1990, Ms. Lazo was making some yummy brownies at home.  As she put the boiling water into a fancy cup, the water was so hot that the bottom of the cup fell off.  Her son Phillip was standing near the stove and the hot water splashed over his leg.  A half an hour later, she took Phillip to the hospital.  The doctor told Ms. Lazo that the burn was really bad and that they need to put a lot of bandages from his thigh to his ankle.  When I talked to Ms. Lazo she said, “Phillip was OK and they let him go home but he couldn’t walk for three days.”  

Nine Year-Old Falls Down Balcony

By Alexis
News Flash!  A nine year-old kid recovered from a hip injury after being pushed by an eleven year-old.  This could have been a fatal accident.  It happened in the hallway at Green Central School on December 17, 2009. In the office, one teacher said, “It’s the freakiest thing that ever happened.”  The nine year-old was using the bathroom on the second floor right after lunch time when the eleven year-old bully came out of no where and pushed him over the balcony. Stay tuned for more details.

Goofy Boy Jumps Out Window on Spring Break and Lives
By Richard 
Richard A. (not the reporter) jumped out of a window on Saturday, March 27 at 11:30 a.m.  He was at home in his apartment on 3530 Portland Avenue. He ran across the living room and jumped out the window because his friend dared him. Luckily, the apartment was on the first floor.  After the incident, Richard A. said, "I did that because I'm not a chicken.  If my friend dares me again, I will do something to prove that I can.

The Big Green Help
By Danny
Kids all over the country are helping to make the world a better place.  They reuse bags to save money and save the environment.  At home, during spring break, they help their parents to do the recycling and clean the neighborhood.  “I help the earth by reusing plastic bags instead of buying expensive trash bags,” said one student at Green Central. Not everyone knows how to care for the environment.  Some kids said, “It’s ridiculous.”  If we don’t reduce, reuse and recycle, we won’t stop global warming.


The Most Embarrassing Holiday Show
By Jeremy
At the holiday show at Green Central in December, people gathered to watch Santa.  Two students, Cornelius and Jeremy took part in the program.  They pushed Santa on a wagon in front of hundreds of Green Central students.  They played their part but still felt a little embarrassed.  After the show, Jeremy said, “Santa was a little heavy.” Cornelius said, “It was fun, but it was also hard to speak on the microphone in front of so many people.   I felt really goofy running with some jingle bells.”  Everyone enjoyed the program; there was lot of singing and clapping in the gym.

Tanzy and Robert Open a Restaurant
By Brittany
On April 6, Tanzy and Robert’s dreams came true.  They finally opened a restaurant on Lake Street.   When I talked to Robert a few days ago, he had found the perfect building for sale.  It was an old building. He said he called Tanzy and yelled, “Yes, I found one!” She said, “Let’s get our business started and make some money!

UFO’s Over Green Central
By Jesus
UFO’s have been flying around Green Central at night.  Neighborhood kids have seen them flying in the dark, landing on the roof of Green Central Park. The kids said, “We saw it, it was a big flashing light. When it disappeared we ran into the school upstairs and in the hallway, but we never found it.”  Students are still wondering if aliens are real.

Ronaldo Superstar
By Charly
Sunday, March 10, 2010. In their last game before going to the World Cup, Brazil beats Spain 4 to 2, Ronaldo scores three goals against Spain at Maracana Stadium in front of 40,000 screaming fans. The brazilian superstar showed everyone that even if he’s getting older, he still knows how to score goals. After the game, Ronaldo said “ It was a hard game, but we did our best to play as a team. It was a very good test for us because Spain is a great team.”


Video Game Champ
By Jonathan
Do you remember when you played video games with your brothers and sisters?  You feel so good the first time you win.  This is what happened to Jonathan on April 6, 2010.  Jonathan and his older brother have played FIFA 08 many times but Jonathan could never win.  He finally did it.  They sat down to play after school; Jonathan was using Manchester United and his brother was using Barcelona.  Jonathan said, “I beat him 2-1!  I finally beat him.  I scored on a free kick.”  It feels great to be a video game champ.


Dog Attack
By Ominee
Pets should always stay with their owners, especially aggressive dogs. In our neighborhood, more people are complaining about stray dogs. Sometimes, they bark and attack passers-by. Last week, a black dog attacked two young girls, Artiesha, and Tyra.  The dog didn’t have a leash.  When they ran, the dog chased them across the street.  We still don’t know why the dog attacked them. 

FIFA 10 USA Defeats Mexico
By Eric
The United States soccer team defeated Mexico 7 to 5.  It was a great game and a big surprise that the U.S. won this game; Mexico was the favorite. It started at 6 a.m. and ended at 7:45 a.m. Not many people saw the game because it started so early.  Most games at the World Cup in South Africa will take place very early for the U.S. fans.  People will have to wake up early to watch the games. Mexican fans are still under the shock of losing this game.  According to the Mexico goal keeper, Ochoa, “They just won because of luck and anyway, a player was blocking my view so I couldn’t see the ball.”



A Cat Lost but Never Found
By Ana

There are cats that like to stay home all day long.  There are cats that like to go outside, in and out of the house.  They usually come back.  Ana lost her cat.  She said, “I opened the window and my cat, Moon, played outside for a couple of hours.  She always comes back.  Today, I don’t know where she is.  I think someone stole her.  I miss my cat.

The Big Crash
By Asiah
On March 20, 1995, a young woman was playing in the street on Chicago and Lake in south Minneapolis. Suddenly, a big truck hit her.  According to people who were on the scene, the truck was going about 40 miles per hour.  The driver didn’t stop.  It’s hard to believe that the young woman survived this accident. 


The Incredible Slam Dunk
By Saysay

“I jumped and slam dunked with one hand,” said the neighbor kid.  Right after school, every Tuesday, neighbor kids get together in Saysay’s front yard to play basketball.  They love to challenge each other to a slam dunk contest. They jump, they run, they dribble and they slam the ball into the basket as hard as they can.  They feel like superstars.


Kickball for Everyone
By Estefany, Charlin, Salma, and Jennifer

Kickball is becoming one of the most popular games at recess.  Last Wednesday, Estefany organized a kickball game on the playground.  She asked her friends, “Do you want to play kickball?”  One of her friends, Danny, told me, “It’s very hard to say no to Estefany.”  They all said, “Sure, let’s play.”  They made two teams.  One team was winning by ten points.  Then Danny made a homerun.  When it was Salma’s turn, she kicked the ball right into the hands of the pitcher so she was out.  There is always a winner and a loser, but everyone had a blast.  




34 comments:

  1. Wow! Great stories

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  2. Jonathan: I agree with you and it does feel bad always loosing a game against you brother. Its like the time when me and my brother were playing UFC and he would always beat me. But don't always feel bad if you don't win all the time because if you win all the time it wouldn't be fun to play anymore

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  3. i liked the "The Moonwalk is Everywhere at Green Central" the most because i feel that no one should forget about mj his presence will always be felt and his dance will live on. love this article i lllove MJ R.I.P the king of pop :)

    p.s. keep dancing Green Central keep dancing

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  4. i thought they did a good job analyzing paragraphs. they wrote interesting supporting details. they made the stories fun to read.

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  5. kadari said...
    Me personally, I am in favor of the
    " The Moonwalk is Everywhere at Green Central. " It is cool to see the younger students interested in something that really interests me. I would like to see some of these kids attempt the moonwalk. Chris seems very observant, the way he described how the moonwalk works shows that he is more than interested in the move.

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  6. My favorite was "a lost Cat and never found , because it is interesting and is the same that happen to me and i think that she miss a lot her cat . She wanted to express her feelings throw this and i liked a lot . i think that did a great job !!!!

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  7. Personally i really like the story "Nine year old falls down the balcony". It was really interesting... it reminds me of my friend irma that fell off her house's balcony and broke her arm. But that was an accident, i agree with the teacher that said that it was the freakish thing. How would another little kid do that? I would like to hear more about it =]

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  8. All this students did a good job on writing. They had details and pictures that makes it more intresting to read. Good job!

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  9. It was sad when i heard about the 9 years old falling down the balcony why did he push him and he didn't do nothing to him. And i like that he shared the story and it was important and nice but sad.

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  10. Hey Ana i like your story. this reminds me of my cat. i lost him and it was sad for me as well.i hope some day you will find the cat, just like i hope someday ill hope i find mine even though it was like 8 years ago :(. remember they have 9 lives :)

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  11. Hey Jeremy..
    I liked you story.I really don't think that it was embarrassing story it was very good.I liked how you guys worked together to get the job done. If he was very heavy that means your very strong.I love this story.
    Later Love Neaja

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  12. "FIFA 10 USA Defeats Mexico" in this story what i really like was that he gives reason why and how mexico got defeat against u.s. i like that he gives that time and i think that the is too early for a soccer game so a lot of people can't watched the games which i don't like.. i think that this year world cup is going to be some good games

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  13. the video game champ i like your story i was just like you loosing to my brother all the time and finally i beat him and i know how you feel, anyways i like you story and it was great reading it.

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  14. These stories are fun to read it reminds me of when I was younger. My advice is that the stories just needs more details.

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  15. Kickball For Everyone, is a good story. Its true how there is always a loser or a winner because every game always will have a winner and one who falls who becomes a loser. Kickball is also coming very popular, everyone knows hows to play it, and i think your right, its a fun game. Your story is also awesome because the name Danny, is just like mine :), but mines with (ie). Nice story, i appreciate reading it and it have also lighten me.

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  16. THAt StORY AbOUt tHE biG CRASH
    tHAt WAS SAD,&& SCARy WOW i KANt bEliEvE tHAt ACtUAlly HAPPENEd
    iTS AMAZiN hOW SHE liVEd.GOOd tOpiC kEEP GOiNG,,:)

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  17. i realy like the story about the big crash cause it was scary just a little bit but i like it

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  18. i really liked all the stories they brought in this lovely website... i like the little story of that little guy jumped his balcony. it reminds me of when i was young, and the neighborhood kids will say that do it this things and i will do it because every kids thing they doing smart things. i feel sorry for the cat that lost. it's good stories to share them..

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  19. Kickball for Everyone
    by: Estefany, Charlin, Salma, and Jennifer
    i agree with them, there is always somebody you cant say no to!! but dare to me different it shows your not a follower and you will really need not to be when you get older.
    this is my favorite line “It’s very hard to say no to Estefany.”

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  20. The Story that liked is the one that is about incredible slam dunk.
    The person is talking about how they dunk in there front yard with
    a lot of kid from the neighborhood. How they could dunking contest
    and then they feel like real superstars.

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  21. I agree with the story call Dog Attack because dogs should always stay with there owner and should always be on a leash.It reminds me off when my friend was walking and this dog just came out of this house and wanted to attack my friend and we told the owner to but a leash because that could cause problems to her with the police. But anyways Ominee you did a good job i really enjoy it.

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  22. They all did a great jobs! the ways they draws the picture its very wonderful for 4th grade. This remind me of when i was in 4th grade i used to do the something.

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  23. nine years old kid fall of of balcony ned some more work it don't got a kid falling off something it just say it i mean tour font is good but you just don't got nobody people in your picture

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  24. i read the all new paper and they were good story. it was interest and all student did a good job. the video game story was more interest and jonathan i like team that you were playing with manchester united. well done

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  25. Asiah (Note: I didn't eat breakfast today and for some reason I keep forgetting how to spell your name after I scroll down.)

    The Big Crash, that is infact a terrible, and saddening story, possibly the worst thing ive heard all week. However, when writing make sure to tell both sides of what happens, to not confuse your readers, because if one side benefits the other, and the other person is left out then it will be something called "Push Pull" tactics. You are however, a great writer and you show much potential, I hope the little advice I have given here will help you as much as it can.

    Brandon.

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  26. i argee with you because the moon walk is a famous dance that everbody should be very familure with. i think the moon walk is a good dance and since micheal jackson is a legend everyone would still know about the moon walk and it wouldnt fad away. also i think you have a good writting idea i really like it keep it up buddy

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  27. I would have to say kick ball for everyone! Because all of the kids are getting along, and play well with each other. :) && everybody knows how to play it!!

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  28. This story is very nice because it remind me that the time I have with my friends their back home in Ethiopia. I agree with these guys because other friend try to drive you life an wrong way not right way because they need that your life became bad. I like when my friend push me to I play sport like Estafeny push her friends to they play sport with her. The kick ball game is very simple sport to play may the rules is hard, Estafeny bush her friends to play this gems because she believe the game is esaiy for everyone

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  29. I like the "FIFA 10 USA DEFEATS MEXICO" because I love how he used examples, and how he put a good picture that make me imagine everything in my head, he really make it interesting, he grab my attention to his writing. He did a good job!!!

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  30. I just want to say all of you guys did really well in all of your writings. You are all telling a story that means something and that tells a story. You guys sure know how to write and draw how you feel, something that happened, etc. :)

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  31. i think that it's sad that the story ''a cat lost but never found'' because i had a dog when i was younger that i liked very much and it ran away and that made me very sad.

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  32. I like the way the person compare their friend to Micheal Jackson to explain how good the person was at doing the moon walk. The prove of when Micheal did the moon walk for the first show that this kid know what this person is talking about.

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  33. I liked that there is an effort to make students aware of dangerous dogs in the neighborhood. It makes me sad that there are such dogs, I wonder what makes them become so mean and dangerous?

    Thanks!
    Ms. Swatosh

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  34. I like the one when Chris teaches us how to moonwalk. Because I been trying to moonwalk along time.

    I really ENJOY writing the INCREDIBLE SLAM DUNK


    Saysay

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